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Sunday, July 17, 2011

Illusions



Illusions

Jangling celestial rhythms
jostle memory, winged
spectors dance on my balcony.
Divine illusions observed?

Their emerald bones clatter,
ominous pantomimes
fill the void, wings flap
flutter. Phantoms, fly away!

(Written for Wordle 13, which can be found at The Sunday Whirl, using the words emerald, flap, balcony, void, bones, rhythm, ominous, divine, illusion, pantomime, celestial, jostles, observe.)
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30 comments:

  1. brenda wJuly 17, 2011 at 6:56 AM

    Mary, This is excellent writing. I like that you "jostle memory" with jangling sound. It's a beautiful opening to this piece. Then "bones clatter," bringing sound to the reader again. This is a dark piece, but has a playfulness to it at the end. I enjoyed it, and am glad you are a faithful wordler. :)
    ~Brenda

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  2. Jae RoseJuly 17, 2011 at 7:14 AM

    Makes me think of a wind chime outside a bedroom window..coming alive at night..when you're alone and thinking..a delicately written and resonant piece..Jae

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  3. ireneJuly 17, 2011 at 9:07 AM

    The sounds in the piece is really effective in chasing away the phantoms!

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  4. ElizabethJuly 17, 2011 at 9:19 AM

    Mary, I too was reminded of wind chimes, sounding in the night, chasing away whatever phandoms might be dancing through the speaker's mind. Tightly woven and well written,

    Elizabeth

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  5. AnnJuly 17, 2011 at 11:02 AM

    You really seem to have a talent for wordles, Mary. A pleasure to read.

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  6. Sherry Blue SkyJuly 17, 2011 at 11:24 AM

    Beautiful use of the wordle words, Mary. I especially love "winged spectors dance on my balcony". Fantastic!

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  7. Judy RoneyJuly 17, 2011 at 11:54 AM

    What a wonderful ethereal wordle, Mary. love this!

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  8. flaubertJuly 17, 2011 at 12:24 PM

    Another beautiful response to the wordle, Mary. I am thinking I should not read others, before writing my own, lol.

    Pam

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  9. UnknownJuly 17, 2011 at 1:25 PM

    I never do the wordles, Mary. You've made me at lease consider it by creating this concise, clearly focused piece.

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  10. PeggyJuly 17, 2011 at 1:32 PM

    Nice Mary--I like where you took these wordle words. I am really enjoying wordles.

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  11. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011 at 2:10 PM

    Wonderful piece... reminds me of my wind chimes.

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  12. Traci BJuly 17, 2011 at 2:12 PM

    Very otherworldly and ephemeral, Mary. Well written! And the fairy image fits it beautifully.

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  13. TheMsLvhJuly 17, 2011 at 6:24 PM

    Charming poem. Lovely piece!

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  14. LynneJuly 17, 2011 at 7:24 PM

    Enchanting poem, Mary, and the image you chose to accompany it is perfect. As some others have said, it reminds me of a beautiful wind chime.

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  15. Laurie KolpJuly 17, 2011 at 9:50 PM

    Mary- I thought of birds outside your window, (but I can also see wind chimes). I wish I could choose a favorite part, but I love each and every word.

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  16. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011 at 9:59 PM

    Mary: I do enjoy all your work, but you sure have a knack for hitting prompts on the head. Also love your ability to find just the right images to go with them. ~Paula

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  17. The UnknowngnomeJuly 18, 2011 at 12:26 AM

    I like what you see.

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  18. Dave KingJuly 18, 2011 at 3:19 AM

    I hear the flap and flutter. Ingenious use of the words.

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  19. annell4July 18, 2011 at 7:41 AM

    Well done Mary... as I continue to struggle with this one.

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  20. Poetic SoulJuly 18, 2011 at 12:42 PM

    I could never pull off wordle, I love the way you just put this together to make it sound great.. I even like the picture

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  21. AnonymousJuly 18, 2011 at 3:40 PM

    I love how you packed an entire story in eight lines. And the alliteration throughout [I keep finding new ones as I reread!] are part of what makes the poem work.

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  22. DaydreamertooJuly 18, 2011 at 3:43 PM

    Lovely mix of the wordle words. I struggled with this this week for some reason.

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  23. barbaraJuly 18, 2011 at 8:54 PM

    So little added and so much gained.
    This is like a wind chime dream catcher.

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  24. MaggieJuly 18, 2011 at 9:22 PM

    Oh, I liked this very much. Such imagery.

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  25. VictoriaJuly 18, 2011 at 10:35 PM

    Strong and eerie Mary. It frightens me, as I think you intended to frighten the reader. Well done.

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  26. Misterio VidaJuly 19, 2011 at 12:31 AM

    good job mary :)

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  27. AnonymousJuly 19, 2011 at 5:38 AM

    I love the first line; such an unusual juxtaposition of words.

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  28. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJuly 19, 2011 at 10:52 AM

    love this one,

    elegant imagery.

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  29. jabblogJuly 19, 2011 at 11:02 AM

    I like 'Their emerald bones clatter' - shiveringly good:-)

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  30. AeriaJuly 20, 2011 at 4:16 PM

    Love this and you have used the words in such a way that they are seamless. Wonderfully done :)
    aeria

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